YOU SAID:
when i've tallied the score and i'm flat on the floor
INTO JAPANESE
スコアを数え終わって床に突っ伏したとき
BACK INTO ENGLISH
When I finished counting the score and fell to the floor
INTO JAPANESE
スコアを数え終わって床に倒れたとき
BACK INTO ENGLISH
When I finished counting the score and fell to the floor
That didn't even make that much sense in English.