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this sentence is grammatically correct but its wordy and hard to read

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この文は文法的には正しいですが、その言葉遣いで読みにくいです

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This sentence is grammatically correct, but the wording makes it difficult to read

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この文は文法的に正しいですが、言葉遣いが読みづらくなります

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This sentence is grammatically correct, but the wording is hard to read

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この文は文法的に正しいですが、言い回しは読みにくいです

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This sentence is grammatically correct, but the wording is hard to read