YOU SAID:
the blood sucker tried to drink her blood but it died of sucking
INTO JAPANESE
吸血鬼は彼女の血を飲もうとしたが、血を吸って死んでしまった
BACK INTO ENGLISH
A vampire tried to drink her blood, but died after drinking it.
INTO JAPANESE
吸血鬼が彼女の血を飲もうとしたが、飲んだ後に死亡した。
BACK INTO ENGLISH
A vampire tried to drink her blood, but died after drinking it.
Come on, you can do better than that.