YOU SAID:
She has stars in her hair and embers in her eyes
INTO JAPANESE
彼女は彼女の髪に星を持ち、彼女の目に残ります
BACK INTO ENGLISH
She holds a star in her hair and remains in her eyes
INTO JAPANESE
彼女は髪の毛に星を持って彼女の目に残る
BACK INTO ENGLISH
She holds a star in her hair and remains in her eyes
That didn't even make that much sense in English.