YOU SAID:

I will make jim an offer he cannot refuse

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私はジムに彼が拒否できない申し出をします

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I make Jim an offer he can't refuse.

INTO JAPANESE

私はジムに断れない申し出をします。

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I make an offer to Jim that I can't refuse.

INTO JAPANESE

私は断れない申し出をジムにします。

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I make Jim an offer I can't refuse.

INTO JAPANESE

私は断れない申し出をジムにします。

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I make Jim an offer I can't refuse.