YOU SAID:
hello there good sir, how are you doing on this fine evening? you wouldent mind me staying here a bit would you?
INTO JAPANESE
こんにちは、良い夜、いかがお過ごしでしょうか?少しここにいてもいいですか?
BACK INTO ENGLISH
hello good evening how are you doing? Can I stay here for a while?
INTO JAPANESE
こんにちは、こんばんは、お元気ですか?しばらくここにいてもいいですか?
BACK INTO ENGLISH
Hello, good evening, how are you? Can I stay here for a while?
INTO JAPANESE
こんにちは、こんばんは、お元気ですか?しばらくここにいてもいいですか?
BACK INTO ENGLISH
Hello, good evening, how are you? Can I stay here for a while?
Come on, you can do better than that.