YOU SAID:
he was very quiet as he looked up at me.
INTO JAPANESE
彼は私を見上げている間とても静かでした。
BACK INTO ENGLISH
He was very quiet while looking up at me.
INTO JAPANESE
私を見上げている間、彼はとても静かでした。
BACK INTO ENGLISH
He was very quiet while looking up at me.
Come on, you can do better than that.